Chat gpt를 활용한 영어 글쓰기 연습 - #1

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Chat gpt를 활용한 영어 글쓰기 연습 - Intro

Chat gpt를 활용한 영어 글쓰기 연습 - Intro

Prompt:

Many people argue that the use of social media has both positive and negative effects on society. Some believe that social media helps connect people, while others believe it leads to isolation and unhealthy comparisons. Write an essay in which you discuss the positive and negative effects of social media on society. Do you think the benefits outweigh the drawbacks, or vice versa? Support your position with reasons and examples.

 

Instructions: In your essay, present a clear introduction, address both the positive and negative aspects of social media, provide specific examples and evidence, and state your overall opinion on whether the benefits outweigh the drawbacks or not. Aim for a well-structured essay with well-developed paragraphs, proper grammar, and logical flow. Your essay should be approximately 300-600 words in length.

 

Before:

  Some people think social media helps connect people. Other people think it leads to isolation and unhealthy comparisons. It’s hard for me to say which one is correct. Although it has some positive effects, I believe that social media has negative effects on our society.

 

  It’s true that social media has positive effects on connecting people. I could find old friends through social media even though I don’t have their numbers on my phone at the moment. On the other hand, I could make a new friend through social media which is completely different from traditional ways like we did in school, workplace, or anywhere else. I could easily start a conversion by sharing my thoughts, and communicate with people who have the same interests with me.

 

  Although social media has positive effects, I would say that it leads to some negative issues in our society. Social media is open to everyone who can use the Internet so it can be very dangerous. We could be a target of crime, or we could be related in dangerous situations even though I’m innocent. Also, it can weaken our in-person communication skills. It’s hard to figure out their feelings or emotions in text-based communication that is used on social media. If we are getting accustomed to online chatting, It means we are getting far from non-verbal communication manners like etiquette while talking. Last, it could lead to unhealthy comparisons. Even though what I have is normal or something regular, in the situation a friend of mine posts about what she bought, mine could turn into very old and ugly.

 

  In conclusion, even though social media helps connect people, I would say that we have to focus on its negative effects, first. No one wants to be a target of crime, lose their communication skills, and be mentally unhealthy. (306 words)

 

ChatGPT:

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1. 더 나은 영어표현 제안: In the introduction, consider rephrasing the sentence "It’s hard for me to say which one is correct" to "Determining which viewpoint is correct is challenging." This slight modification improves the sentence's structure.

It’s hard for me to say which one is correct.
(변경) Determinating which viewpoint is correct is challanging. 

 

2. 글에 대한 코멘트: In the paragraph discussing the positive effects of social media, consider using more specific examples to illustrate how social media facilitates connections and conversations. This will add depth to your argument.

(추가) For example, If you are interested in running, you could find people who can participate in this upcoming marathon with you. 

3. 더 나은 영어표현 제안: In the paragraph discussing negative effects, the sentence "Social media is open to everyone who can use the Internet so it can be very dangerous" could be clearer if rephrased: "Since social media is accessible to anyone with Internet access, it poses potential dangers.

Social media is open to everyone who can use the Internet so it can be very dangerous. 
(변경) Since social media is accessible to anyone with internet access, It poses potential dangers. 

 

4. 글에 대한 코멘트: When discussing the negative impact on communication skills, you might elaborate on the importance of non-verbal cues and how they can be lost in online interactions.

(추가) Let's say that you're talking to someone with the subject that you're passinate about. You might not allow them to have any breaks during the conversation. In a face to face interaction, you can easily recognize their emotions by observing their facial expressions or behaviors. They might clear their throat. They might use their hand gestures as a signal that we need a pause. However, It's not easy to catch non-verbal signals in chat rooms, unless they use facial emojis.

 

5. 더 나은 영어표현 제안: In the final paragraph, rephrase "even though social media helps connect people, I would say that we have to focus on its negative effects, first" to "Despite the fact that social media aids in connecting people, the emphasis should be on its primary negative effects."

Even though social media helps connect people, I would say that we have to focus on its negative effects, first.
(변경) Despite the fact that social media aids in connecting people, the emphasis should be on its adverse effects.

 

Rev1:

  Some people think social media helps connect people. Other people think it leads to isolation and unhealthy comparisons. It’s hard for me to say which one is correct. Determinating which viewpoint is correct is challanging. Although it has some positive effects, I believe that social media has negative effects on our society.

 

  It’s true that social media has positive effects on connecting people. I could find old friends through social media even though I don’t have their numbers on my phone at the moment. On the other hand, I could make a new friend through social media which is completely different from traditional ways like we did in school, workplace, or anywhere else. I could easily start a conversion by sharing my thoughts, and communicate with people who have the same interests with me. For example, If you are interested in running, you could find people who can participate in this upcoming marathon with you. 

 

  Although social media has positive effects, I would say that it leads to some negative issues in our society. Social media is open to everyone who can use the Internet so it can be very dangerous. Since social media is accessible to anyone with internet access, It poses potential dangers. We could be a target of crime, or we could be related in dangerous situations even though I’m innocent. Also, it can weaken our in-person communication skills. It’s hard to figure out their feelings or emotions in text-based communication that is used on social media. If we are getting accustomed to online chatting, It means we are getting far from non-verbal communication manners like etiquette while talking. Let's say that you're talking to someone with the subject that you're passinate about. You might not allow them to have any breaks during the conversation. In a face to face interaction, you can easily recognize their emotions by observing their facial expressions or behaviors. They might clear their throat. They might use their hand gestures as a signal that we need a pause. However, It's not easy to catch non-verbal signals in chat rooms, unless they use facial emojis. Last, it could lead to unhealthy comparisons. Even though what I have is normal or something regular, in the situation a friend of mine posts about what she bought, mine could turn into very old and ugly.

 

  In conclusion, even though social media helps connect people, I would say that we have to focus on its negative effects, first. Despite the fact that social media aids in connecting people, the emphasis should be on its adverse effects. No one wants to be a target of crime, lose their communication skills, and be mentally unhealthy.

 

Rev2:

처음 ChatGPT가 지적하진 않았지만, 개인적으로 영어로 어떻게 써야할 까 했었던 부분만 떼어 질문.

Chat gpt_Writing practice_#1_2

Last, it could lead to unhealthy comparisons. Even though what I have is normal or something regualr, in the situation that a friend of mine posts about what she bought, mine could turn into very old and ugly.

(변경) Even though I may possess something ordinary, when a friend shares a post about their recent purchase, I find myself comparing and devaluing what I have.

 

Final comments:

• pose /ex. Since social media is accessible to anyone with internet access, it poses potential dangers.
• posses /ex. Even though I may posses something ordinary, when a friend shares a post about their recent purchase, I find myself comparing and devaluing what I have.